This seems familiar. Are you moving all of your ff.net stories over here? Good idea, if so. LJ just seems much friendlier all around.

Anyway, review...I like the repeating, "It was pulled back, glistening, forcing him to stare" and how it was used in various places in the story. It's a very good line and I just like it everywhere it appeared. Overall, wonderful job, as always. :)